Show, Don't Tell Writing

Show, Don't Tell

I am up to here with you. I'm going to my room.’Aghh why do my parents hate me so much’.Is it my hat or my clothes maybe my hair Whatever it is i’m going to get to the bottom of this.

My door has now got a crack down the middle,because I slammed it so hard. My parents will be fuming.I am so angry that I grab a rock out of my collection and throw it as hard as I could.SMASH goes the window as the rock thumps into it.

I turn to look at my mirror, my tears are streaming down my face at speed and are soon going to flood the town like a tsunami.

THE KEYS:

Say-red

Look-orange

Do-purple

Think-green

Feel-blue

  

Science can crush

                                                

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Before

For science Te Poutama have been changing classes. Room 17 have been going to Mrs Greens class.We have been looking at fire and flames. The experiment we have been doing is what I will be explaining. First we got into groups of five then my group nominated Tu to go get the gear that we needed this it includes,a can sized 250ml,mentholated spirits in a little glass container,a tripod with a net on top and that is all we used. We lighted the mentholated spirit and put some water in our can. As we watched the can heat up we heard bubbling! Once steam started coming out the top of the can we knew it was time for Mrs Green to flip the can over into ice and water and then the can crushed! This happens when the vacuum gets to powerful for the can and then when it hit the water it instantly crushed! Here are some photos to show the before and after product.

My Cross Country training times.

This is my cross country times in a graph. As I was injured for most of this I have few times.My personal best is 2:14 and would like to get under 2:10. We have been doing cross country training in preparing for the Inter schools cross country, We also have our school cross country soon so we are training hard. Hope you like my graph.

Spooky 100 word story

THE SPOOKY STORY...

As I slowly faint in desperation of  seeing what was going on. I was sat down comfortably watching tv until the light’s turned off, then I felt a rush of agony shoot up my leg like I a cheetah pouncing  its prey. I dropped to the ground like a gust of wind, then I suddenly hear a knock at the door, as I can't walk I shouted ‘come in and  help’, as the door slowly creaked open I took the biggest gasp of my life then listened carefully and there was a bang, what was going on?..

100 word story,The Helpless Sailor.

The Helpless Sailor.

As I lie down on a piece of hard wood I wonder what it is, oh, it's only the boat that I row 18 hours a day until I reach shore. .I wish I could fly away like a seagull. I have no food, I wish I had chips and something sweet. All I do is row and row! When can I leave this thug life and become a billionaire? Oh I'm homeless though. I have no money. I only have this boat to survive. No family nothing. I can’t survive. How can I do it, HELP.

100 word story-the light from outside

The light from outside.

She was shocked to see a diamond glaring through the window it was as bright as the sun in the hottest part of the day. She walked towards this awfully weird shaped diamond. It was as big as a Tyrannosaurus Rex. It  was all squiggly and in lots of ties and twists. As she got closer her heart beat faster and faster until her nose was right on it.Seconds later she was walking round this object amused.  She shakes like a worm wriggling away from a bird , then she saw something.It was an angel!

Onomatopoeia poem

          CLASH ROOM DEMOLITION

Boom crash is the sound which goes through my mind when they break through the wall of room 11.

Bang goes all the wood falling from the sky like a Tsunami of birds falling from the plane beyond us.

Crunch goes the roof as they slowly pull on it till it hits the ground with a Thump.Smash bang goes the buildings worst nightmare getting ready to pounce yet again.I wasn't sure what to listen to the crashing,or the screaming/chanting from kids.Then the excavator pressed down on the door,the glass was still in it then in front of my eyes the door which I have walked through rumbled to the ground like a boulder falling from a hill at speed.